Definitely did not see that coming.
Nice Hellraiser reference
That was a lovely piece of work, and in 48 hrs? Congrats on a job well done!
Dude too soon
The Titanic happened almost a century ago have respect for the families, man!
Just kidding. That was an enjoyable short and I must say I did not expect vegetables. The constant mumbling and muttering of dialogue reminded me of Popeye cartoon dialogues. All in all this is a funny flash. Good job.
Had to giggle in the end. You really had me going. For a second I started looking at the blue T at the top of the video thinking, "This IS rated teen right, right?!"
But once again, well done.
I don't know what's funnier
Gooseboy or the narrator. Seriously? Dr. Richard N. Yurrbut? Haha, listening to these two was entertaining.
Will Wilderness Watchers become a series of weird made up animals? I'd definitely watch that!
I think I've watched this 6 times already
I really enjoy this adaptation of the spider man idea in feudal Japan. I agree with NGers this could make a really fun game.
By the way notdavidman the green guy isn't Blanka from SF it's the green goblin as an oni ^_^ silly.
I won't lie to ya...
definitely did not see that coming. That sun is my favorite. I hope to see more from you in the future!
I promise my criticism is meant to be constructive
Things like the boy sleeping outside do not constitute as plot holes. However certain things with the consideration of the time passed in the story can. For instance, why is the bird injured even after all these years? One could expect the bird to be healed. Plus, you stated the boy's friends died in that fire, but why are they still in the forest after those years?
This brings me to another point- how are we supposed to know the boy's friends are still in the forest? Yes I know boy scouts do certain exercises in the forest, but their presence after those many years is not communicated in your short film. Several things aren't, such as why the boy is so compelled to stay in the forest. Yes the bird is hurt but ask yourself would you stay in the forest for years or get an adult? I read your statement and I guess it makes sense after knowing the bird is a demon (the boy was enchanted I'm surmising), but once again that isn't communicated very well to the audience. You don't want your audience to think, "Oh...um...so it... was a demon...?" at the end, when I'm guessing you wanted more of a shocked response.
In addition, we don't know the intentions of the demon so it's very confusing at the end.
Now making a short film is tough, and it's great you guys were able to pull it off in the time allotted. However, work around your limitations. In your situation, time was the biggest limitation, so you had to leave out a lot of detail that would have helped us piece things together and enjoy this piece of work. If you need us to read the script to understand it, that's a bad sign.
I wouldn't suggest you try to pull off a film that requires a lot more development in the story in 48hrs. Or better yet, I wouldn't suggest you choose a story that requires a lot of development for a 48hr competition. With time limitations like these its best to go with very short, but well written plots. Trust me on that.
I'm sure if you had a lot more time this could have become something great.
5/10 for effort. Like I said you still pulled it off, unlike some people I'm sure.
Thanks for the review, we did not much have choice with the story and the story was one of the longer ones, they were randomly assigned to make it fair. I can agree with a lot of the plot points you brought up but in the end we concentrated on the animation and art and the music, a lot of the other movie jam submissions do not feature more than 1 song, let alone 6 songs in which one of them was specially composed specifically for this submission (out here in the forest). We also made a polished menu and extras section that provides you with some evidence of the giant amount of work that we put into this flash. I'm not sure how long other teams spent on their animations but we collectively spent at least 60 hours on this. The ending scenes were made in 40 minutes due to the fast approaching deadline.
So if you give a 5 for effort I can't quite see where you are coming from.
What a wonderfully produced short with a message about a current issue.
I have heard about this, and you know what? I don't want companies controlling our internet! I will research this further and I will write a letter.
Remember everyone the worst act is apathy, Take action if you believe in something. Politicians will listen if the public in mass speaks up.
A bunch of characters talking
For that long doesn't make something good.
The variety of styles was cool, and it had its small funny moments in between the chit-chat but I found myself nodding off wondering when it would end.
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